tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32426825.post7046922058803163394..comments2024-03-08T03:13:14.327-05:00Comments on John McFetridge: Free e-book - East CoastJohn McFetridgehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09442198820998606682noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32426825.post-53813034931109231532010-05-17T18:34:19.127-04:002010-05-17T18:34:19.127-04:00Yeah, after I wrote that I realized that it worked...Yeah, after I wrote that I realized that it worked fine as a scene direction. So it's not what happens that needs the tweak, just for a story it would be said slightly differently.seana grahamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03774794086733027289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32426825.post-84823266042193705062010-05-17T18:17:30.899-04:002010-05-17T18:17:30.899-04:00Thanks for the feedback everybody.
Yeah, Seana, t...Thanks for the feedback everybody.<br /><br />Yeah, Seana, the ending...<br /><br />In the script version I had music over images, Isobel finishing at the hospital, driving home, seeing Jerry -- all that with no diaogue, just the looks on the actors' faces and the music.<br /><br />You know, the rock video ending so many shows use these days ;)<br /><br />I think you're right, it didn't translate to prose very well.<br /><br />But I do like the format, so thanks again.John McFetridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09442198820998606682noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32426825.post-11409245349030759272010-05-16T15:06:24.449-04:002010-05-16T15:06:24.449-04:00I really enjoyed it. I like the humor in it, and I...I really enjoyed it. I like the humor in it, and I really love the way you do dialogue. <br /><br />The very last line didn't quite work for me, I guess it felt abrupt, and was already implied, but since you're really asking about the bigger concept, yes, it's aces.seana grahamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03774794086733027289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32426825.post-88738564962710961582010-05-13T20:51:01.225-04:002010-05-13T20:51:01.225-04:00Love it, John. Easily workable into a novel, a ser...Love it, John. Easily workable into a novel, a series of short stories, a TV show, whatever you want to do with it. The dialog and pace are up to your usual standards, and the characters are outstanding.Dana Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01350344882342624735noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32426825.post-61606896064904990802010-05-13T00:38:54.108-04:002010-05-13T00:38:54.108-04:00Here some feedback: it was absolutely fucking bril...Here some feedback: it was absolutely fucking brilliant.adrian.mckintyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10838262042075970079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-32426825.post-42043983336498787772010-05-11T12:38:19.924-04:002010-05-11T12:38:19.924-04:00Just downloaded it onto my iPod Touch via Stanza. ...Just downloaded it onto my iPod Touch via Stanza. Looking forward to reading it.Scott D. Parkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15293540073601809197noreply@blogger.com