Wednesday, January 07, 2009

Tighter

Second draft, it's a little tighter and the text should be easier to read.

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Thanks for the input so far, keep those cards and letters coming.

5 comments:

Kasey D. said...

It is tighter and better. The new font really helps the words stand out. That's especially true for the last line.

My only complaint is with the first line of text. It should be raised up a tad so it doesn't go onto the letter boxing.

Kasey D. said...

Also, the line about the bridge's length works better now that it is over a shot of the bridge.

Dana King said...

I like it, and I'm not a big fan of book trailers.

One complaint: I now have that damn tune stuck in my head. It works well for the trailer, but there's no real musical resolution so it just keeps running throuhg my head over and over and over and over and over...

Linda L. Richards said...

Wonderful, though I like the first version a bit better. It's grittier and nastier than the newer version, which reflects you, I think. (And youk now I mean that in the nicest possible way.)

But, either way? Rocks, McFetridge! Well done.

John McFetridge said...

Thanks again everybody.

and Dana, the song is a jam and it never does have any resolution - well, never that I've heard ;)